scarlet opinions: There’s blood on his teeth. It occurs to him that most people would be...
foolhardywaistcoats:
There’s blood on his teeth. It occurs to him that most people would be more concerned about that, but all Grantaire feels is a vague sort of disappointment knowing that drinking tonight is going to sting like hell. He groans plaintively and spits.
“I blame you for this.”
Bahorel snorts,…
reblogging to a side account! this is phee! hi.
OKAY SO A) UM THIS IS GRE8888?? i love this friendship and it needs more attn and you have given it, this is fantab. below are some vague micro-editty nitpicks. assume anything i didn’t mention is splendid because it probably is, GOSH, what a good.
And Grantaire confesses himself impressed.
phrasing is just a teeny bit odd, i think you were going for “admits”? it doesn’t seem like the right verb in this particular case
It occurs to him that most people would be more concerned about that,
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and occurs to him that most people would be more concerned about this.
you’re missing an “it” before the “occurs” in the last one, and I think the this/that should probably match up if you’re going for an echo!
….aND THAT’S ALL. IT’S PErf. you’re perf. blows a kiss